Long ago in Ancient Greece there lived a creature called the Snull. It was half bull and half snake and terrified the whole of Persia. It had red eyes, massive horns and a tail which could wrap itself around its victim and squeeze it to death. One day King Taurus decided he had had enough of it and chose to ask the citizens who would volunteer to kill it. Nobody volunteered. He promised great wealth and land to who succeeded. Still nobody volunteered. Prince Dromes then asked his dad if he could go. Taurus immediately refused. Dromes so desperately wanted to go that he disguised himself as a poor young villager. He went to the king and asked for permission. Not knowing who the villager was he approved and sent him on his way.
The very next night King Taurus was going bonkers trying to find Dromes. All the guards searched and searched until the next day. In the meanwhile Dromes was going around villages asking for directions to the Snull’s lair. Nobody knew the exact location as nobody dared to seek it out. After a week he stumbled across a cave with rotten bones and chunks of fur lying outside. He instantly knew it could only be the Snull’s home. He went inside and heard a very quiet scream for help. He followed the noise and came across a place where there where a few torches lighting a circular room. He then saw a girl tied up to a pole. He let her free and she told him that the Snull was hunting in more towns for people to be his breakfast. They came up with a cunning plan to defeat the Snull…
As planned the Snull would come inside and see everything as usual. Dromes was hiding in the dark with his dagger waiting for his moment to strike. While the animal was distracted Dromes jumped out and slashed with his sword at the beast’s neck. Unfortunately when he was about to attack the Snull walked away to look at his new meal. Seeing Dromes it charged into him and tossed him into the air with his horns. It caught him with his tail and started squeezing him to death. Dromes then found the power he did not know he possessed and hauled himself onto its back. He then kept on slashing his sword at the beast. With one mighty slash at its neck it moaned its last and fell lifelessly onto the ground.
Dromes then freed all the people who had been captured and took them home. He returned to the king’s palace and presented the Snull’s head to the king. Later that day was the ceremony in honour of the villager who had killed the Snull. Everybody gathered as he was presented with the rewards he had been promised. But as he was about to be given his reward he took off his disguise and showed everybody who he was. There was a long silence until King Taurus finally said “We can’t give the reward to a prince.” “Why don’t we give it to the people then,” said Dromes. The king approved and there was a big cheer among the crowd. “All hail prince Dromes the Snull slayer!” They shouted. It took a while till everyone settled down and went off to bed and everything continued as usual.
1. I liked that Prince Dromes disguised himself as a villager to fight the monster. 2. I also liked that they gave the reward to the people. 3. But I think you could say more about King Taurus
In the ancient times on a mountain there was a beast it was half bull, half dragon. It was called Dragull and it was terrifying. If he touched a person or an animal they would turn in to a stone forever. He could shoot fire from his mouth and could set fire to a village .All the villagers were too scared to enter the mountains. No one had ever been brave enough to find and kill the terrifying beast. They had been scared that the Dragull would come to their village. They also didn’t go up there, not because of that they would turn into stone, if the villager ran down from the mountains to the village the Dragbull would come after the villager and kill the villager and destroy the village. One day there was a man called Minos he had heard about the beast and decided to help the poor villagers. So he told the villagers that he was going to make their life easy for them. The villagers were so happy that a man had come to help them at last. So he stayed in a house that the villagers had offered him. It was their best cozy and warm house because he was going to kill the beast the next day. But the man had not slept all night he had been making a plan to kill the beast. But he had had some sleep. In the morning he sharpened all the weapons he needed to kill the beast. He put his armor on and when he got out of the house the whole village was cheering for him. He was so happy and nervous. So he went along walking to the mountain after a few hours he was tiered and lost he had no food and was starving. But he didn’t give up as few days past he saw a wise man who was camping. Because Minos needed to get to the mountain he had to through the forest. He asked the wise man for help. The man was generous to give him some food and gave him a compos to guide his way. Minos thanked him so he set of and when he arrived at were the beast lived, he saw how big and terrifying the beast was but he was not going to give up. So he started to fight with this beast for many days. At last the Dragbull was weak and Minos gave him one last hit and he thought the dragbull was dead but no the dragbull was not dead. It was just weak, to shoot Minos. Minos was turned into stone but what Minos did not know that he was powerful to escape the beasts magic so after few days minos was not stone any more. He went to kill the best this time and he had killed the beast and went back to the village. All the villagers were so happy they let him have there best house forever. He was rewarded 1000000000000000000000000000000000 gold.
At the end I liked the way you used 100000000000000000000000000000000000 gold at the end as a reward because he did a good thing for the village. liked the beast as well half bull and half dragon it might have been terrifiying
I liked the part when Minos had gone to kill the beast because he was so brave and when he met the wise man who gave a cumpus but in the end how did he defeat the Dragull
1. I liked how he sharpened all his weapons. 2. I liked how he was rewarded with 1000000000000000000000000000000000000000 gold. 3. You wrote there instead of they're.
The beast must have been terrifying.Because dragon and the bull are both strong.But the part when you said there were hairs were a bit strange because the bull doesn't take the shower or anything and the hair can't come out of its body.
Hi Hazal I liked your story a lot and it was very interesting. My favourite part was when Minos thought that the beast was dead but it was not. I think you need to read back your writting because some parts did not nake sence.
King Theseus of Athens was a powerful ruler. He was loved by his people because he protected and provided for all the villages in Athens. His son Prince Percy was a very brave young man seeking for an adventure. Athens was not always safe because every midnight comes a creature called Ligon. It was half lion, half dragon. His mission was to set villages on fire and eat all humans in order to survive. During the daytime it fly's back to his cave on the Island of Crete to sleep. Percy was tired of this beast killing his father's people. So bravely he asked his father's permission if he can go and kill the monster. His father very concerned replied, "yes you may go and you can use the boat of Athens". "You should also use these two types of sails", said the King. One is white and the other is black. The white one means that they are still alive, the black one meant that they had died. "Farewell my son, and I will be waiting for you", said King Theseus. The next day Percy sailed to the Island of Crete along with five brave men. When they arrived, they went to find the beast and kill it before dark. Percy told the men that the cave is on top of the mountain. When they arrived, they began to climb the mountain. After ten minutes the Ligon flew down and captured all six men and put them a wooden cage. Everywhere in the cage there were bones from other victims. Percy found a plan to break out of the cage, by taking out his sword and cut the wooden cage. He moved slowly and quietly like a mouse towards the creature. With mighty sword he chopped the creature's head off. He then cut his wings and with the help of his men, they made a glider. They glided towards the shore and jumped into the boat with the creatures head.
As he was arriving in Athens he remembered to raise his white sails as an indication that he was alive. When his father saw that he was overjoyed and he gathered everybody from Athens for a welcome home party.
Today the head of Ligon is still seen hanging on the top of the hill to remind everyone that Athens is in no danger.
I liked te way you used '' he was seeking for an adventure'' and the end when you did ''today the head of ligon is still seen hanging on the top of the hill to remind that athens is in no danger'' but I think it can be bigger.
1. I liked that the ligons head was put on the top of a hill to show the people they were in no danger. 2. I liked that it had the white flags like in Theseus and the Minotaur. 3. But you could've described the 5 men better.
Well,your story is very well written but l think you copied one of the myth and legend story,especially when you said black is s dead and white is alive.
It was so long that nobody could even remember what was there. It happened when there were still dragons and other scary creatures. In the most Ancient place in the whole wide world… In Egypt!
In a small city lived an unusual boy, his name was Scotty. He was very strong and even when he was very small when could lift up everything, even his bed!
Once in a rainy day Scotty’s mother heard that there was a giant beast in Cairo, near their village, about to burn all the houses in Egypt! Scotty begged his mom if he could try to beat the Dragon, but his mother would never ever let him. There were other kids who wanted to join him. His own brother Jake and even his sister Florence would like to try (They thought the dragon was just a toy which they could break). They begged, and begged and finally managed to make their mom agree to let them go.
They packed their stuff and left towards the Desert. Florence took a map with her and a ball of string that she used to create a big trap for that monster.
“Oh, look we have to go in that Desert. I’m staying here no matter what!” Shouted Florence. She was too scared of going into that Desert because of the food and the water situation. She was saying she would lose that big string trap which she was making for ages. “Please come, we will take care of all your stuff!” Said Jake. Finally they all went in and their feet were starting to get stuck in the sand…. It was very hard getting out of the sand, and on the way Scotty was the only one left. His brother and sister got injured so they tried to get back home however they got so sick that they fell and fainted. TO BE CONTINIUED...
When Jake woke up he could not see Florence, they got separated. Scotty reached the place where the Dragon lived. The villagers gave Scotty the best sword and shield they had, showed him the way to the dragons cave where in every corner sculls, cobwebs and skeletons lay.
By this time Jake and Florence found each other by shouting names and coming towards the calling. And later, when they realized Scotty was not near, they remembered that they felt sick and let him go alone to beat the dragon. “We should come to Scotty and help him!” worried Florence said. Jack agreed and they went to the villagers to ask for a map. After they got it they ran as fast as they could because they knew Scotty was in big trouble…
When Scotty reached the end of the cave the monster popped out in front of him and took him by the leg, up into the air and was about to eat him! But then Scotty remembered he had the trap that his sister made. He tied one end to the stone, and then flew down like a monkey! Later he took his sword to fight the dragon! But the dragon quickly snatched the sword and threw it on the floor which made a big thump!
“We finally made it!” Shouted Jake.
Florence was so happy that she fell on the floor and rolled very fast to a giant leg, and her smile faded away, it was the Dragon!
“What are you doing here?” Said Scotty, as he kicked the dragon on the head.
“We came here to help you!” Shouted Florence, using her trap to capture the monster.
When Florence finally got the beast she pulled it as hard as she could and dragged the monster with Scotty and Jake’s help to the cliff, and in a moment or two they managed to throw the dragon down the cliff! But what they did not know is that the dragon could fly…
In about five seconds the dreadful beast appeared and bit Scotty with his fiery teeth! Scotty did not give up, so he secretly crept to the cave and got his sword, took it and ran to beat the monster. Scotty was winning, he used the sword very carefully until the beast used its tail and broke the sword! Scotty was so angry that he ran to the monster and picked it up threw it on the floor; He never knew he had that power! Then he asked Florence for the big trap, when she gave the trap they all covered the beast with it so it could not escape!
Later when the kids were about to go Jake forgot the map, it was left in the cave! However the saved villagers gave them a present! It was a flying carpet, and if you went in and said where you want to be, you would be there in no time. Scotty took the present, placed it on the floor, told his brother and sister to come and they flew away!
When they came home their mother was very happy, she prepared a wonderful dinner and asked her children everything what happen!
It is said that in their house there is a flying carpet lying on their dining table till now, and every night it fly’s around and has very much fun!
I liked all the description that you had put in and that Scotty and his brother and sister got a magic carpet but how did the childeren thing the dragon could not fly didnt they see the wings
Maxima your story is very long!!I liked when they got present which was flying carpet that get back to there house.Also I liked when the dragon took the sword and threw it to the ground .
Wow!your story was very long and good too.I felt happy when they killed the dragon with the trap.It was also amazing when Scotty threw the dragon.He should have been very strong!
Long ago, there was a woman called Arianne in the Ancient Greece. She was as strong as Hercules and beautiful as Aphrodite. She was also a princess in Athens too. In Athens there was a problem. The people who were from Athens complained the king of Athens every day. The princess Arianne was sure that she heard screams, bumps and all sorts of noisy sounds coming out of people's houses. The palace was always crowded cause people were always complaining. She couldn't stand it anymore and told her father that she should go and sleep at one of the neighbor's house and see what was going on. Her father king Magnum, was desperate for Arianne to not go. However, Arianne didn't change her mind.... The day after that, Arianne went to an old neighbor’s house and asked her if she could sleep there for 1 night. The old lady's answer was "yes” because she wanted Arianne to save her from the terror. At that night, when the clock stroke 12 o'clock Arianne could hear some sounds of someone walking. She was sure that it was someone who surprised everyone. The door opened and the creature came into the house of the old lady’s. After a while, Arianne could see a candle and a torch.IT WAS A SHADOW MAN!!!!She was so surprised that she nearly fainted but got her mind back and thought of some ways to get away from the shadow man. Her best idea was to break the torch, switch off the light and blow the candle. The idea of hers worked very well because it was shadow man and shadow can't survive without the light. From then on, the shadow man didn't come back to Athens because it was so frightened of Arianne. So, that’s how she began her life of heroine.
I liked that Arianne went to save her people from Athens and that when the clock struck 12:00 the shadow man came but next time I think you should have made both the hero/heroin and the villian fight togeather.
Your myth was very cool!I liked when Shadow didn't came back because of the Arianne. Also I liked when the Arianne was so surprised because of the shadowman.I think you could wrote more longer.
A long time ago in an old castle lived a king called king Peter. King Peter had a daughter called Audra. King Peter lived in a huge castle with his daughter but the castle was an old castle. His daughter was a very pretty girl. In one of the rooms he kept a monster the monster was half tiger half snake. That room’s door was locked so that no one could open it. He kept the monster there if any enemies would attack. No one knew where the key was except for King Peter and Audra. Their enemy was King Anton and his son Lenny. Audra didn’t want to fight. She didn’t want to have enemies. Lenny didn’t like fighting either but he knew they were in danger with the monster alive. So he went to try and kill the monster. He took everything he needed. He took his sword he took arrows and he set of on his way. He knew this was going to be hard because the monster was very powerful. It could catch and hit with its snake tail and scratch or bite with its teeth. But he would still try and kill the monster. Auda saw him coming and asked him what he was here for. So he told her and she decided to help him because she didn’t want to have enemies. She gave him the key of the room and told him that the weak spot of the monster was its ears it got weak when it heard loud sounds. So he went in and made as much sound as he could. Then he saw his chance and killed the monster. When he killed the monster he came out and thanked Audra for her help.Audra told her dad what happened .At first he was angry then later on he was happy of that.Lenny told his dad too and he was happy also. Both kings were happy and there was no more fighting.
I really liked your myth.I liked when the Lenny took all the thing that he had to kill the monster.Also I liked when the Audra gave him a key to go inside.I think you could watch spellings!
Your myth was very interesting because you used a lot of adjectives and you described the monster really well. My favorite part was when both of the kings were happy. I think you could describe the setting better.
I liked that bothe daughter or the son did not want fight but you should have told how big the room was where the monster was kept and you should have made both of them fight because how was it so easy to kill the creature.
Hi Ulgen, Your story was great! I liked the part when you said that the door was locked, and only the king and his daughter could free the monster. Maxima
Once there was a terrifying creature called the Monger who lived in a cave near the beach every night it would go through the woods and set fire to someone’s house. The Monger had three red eyes it had hairy skin and teeth like knives. This strange animal was half monkey half tiger.
One silent night the Monger walked through the woods to set fire to someone’s house suddenly it heard a CRACK a tree fell over in front of the Monger. Then the Monger had to go around the tree and go to a house that everyone was asleep in. The Monger found a house so the Monger jumped on the roof and broke it he robbed two people named Charlie and Susan then they both woke up and escaped then house caught on fire and burnt down.
The Monger retreated so it would not go to jail and die. The Monger ran in to his cave and hid on the end of the cave because it was dark and spooky but what he did not notice was everyone could see his shiny red eyes. When the Monger woke up the cops suddenly saw and caught the Monger. The cops threw the Monger in jail...
I liked the story i liked that you put the descripsion clearly and neatly but what you could improve on is when you put broke it you should put a full stop and then he
I liked your story so much because it was interesting and it made you exited to read on. I liked the part when Monger robbed the house. I think you could have writen a bit more.
Your myth was nice.I liked when the Monger walked through the wood to set a fire to someone's house then suddenly it heard a crack and tree fell over the Monger.I think you could wrote more longer.
Hi Nicolas, Your story was very good! I really liked the way you described your monster! You could improve on writing some commas in your Myth. Maxima.
Long long time ago there was a man his name was Jack, he lived in the mountains where he had small hut he lived. One morning he had gone for a walk, while he was walking he came across a place he had never seen before. It was a cave, Jack decided to go in the cave. It was pitch black so he had put his arms in front him. Jack kept on going until his hands touched a hairy beast......... "Ahhhhh!" screamed Jack.
Jack ran as fast as he could and managed to get out, but then the hairy beast came, its tail looked like a snake his body like a lion and a head of a human. "My name is Snalyman 1 upon 3 snakes, 1 upon 3 lion and 1 upon 3 human. I own the cave you came in so you will wish that you hadn’t come in." said Snalyman "Please don’t eat me!" pleaded Jack. Suddenly a blue thing jumped onto Snalyman. “Hello my name is Catman I am the police of this mountain, never come here and go home. "Thanks." But Snalyman was getting up and attacked Catman." Run! “Shouted Catman but Jack got a branch and hit on Snalyman. But Snalyman dodged and started chasing Jack, but Jack jumped up to dodge Snalyman."You can’t defeat me!" "Yes I can." And the next 0.000001 second Catman came from behind and pushed Snalyamn off the mountain. "How can I repay you." said Jack "Never come here again."
"Ok," said Jack and from that day on Jack never came here again.
1. I liked that in 0.000001 second Catman came from behind and pushed Snalyman off the mountain. 2. I liked that his name was Snalyman. 3. I don't understand what this means: 1 upon 3 snakes, 1 upon 3 lion and 1 upon 3 human.
Hi Ali, Your story was very creative! I liked the way you named your heroes. The only thing i don't understand is: if you wrote this myth was a long time ago, how could your "Catman" exist? Maxima
I really liked your story ecspesially the part when catman comes. I also liked the part where snalyman dies. I think you should read back to check if it makes sence.
Long ago in ancient Rome a boy named Jack lived in a cave. The cave was close to the Coliseum. One day when he came home to the cave he saw dead bodies covered in blood. Then he saw a monster. The monster was half dragon and half bull. When Jack saw the beast he ran as fast as he could to the city but the beast was chasing him when Jack got to the city he closed the gates. Then he ran to the palace to tell the guards and the empire. Then his solders ran off to find the beast 10 hours later the solders still hadn’t returned so another grope of solders went to find the beast. When the solders got to the cave they saw the beast. Then they tried to escape but it was too late the beast had seen them. They were scramming so loud the cave started to crumble down everyone was dead accept one solder when he woke up he looked for survivors there were no survivors then he started walking to the palace. Then he saw the beast then the solder took his sword and killed the beast when he returned he told the king then the king gave him 100 gold coins
Keenan I liked your myth.When Jack ran to places and went to the palace to tell the empire and guards.Also I liked when the soldiers went to find the beast for 10hours.I think you could watch spellin.
I liked your story very much because it was very interesting. My favourite part was when the king gave him 100 gold coins. I think you should make your sentences shorter.
Hi Keenan, your story was very good! I liked the part when Jack beat the beast! Maybe you could find another word for "Then" because you used it quite a lot! Maxima
In Ancient Greek, Mountain there was a creature called Devilman who never dies and had pointy red horn. That Devilman was lonely so he went to the village. That village had lots of beautiful ladies. The Devilman took the ladies to the mountain. There was a man called Areculas who was the prince of Athens who had strong arms and powerful weopons. Areculas heard about the Devilman and brought him to the sea and threw into the sea. Now the Devilman was gone. But next day the Devilmen was alive.Areculas was so surprised. Now the Devilman took the children. So Areculas went to Devilman and hit Devilman's finger with the stone. Now the Devilman was dead. All the people who lived at the village were really happy.
Hi Min Joo Your myth was very interesting and i liked it very much. I liked the part when Areculas killed the Devilman. I think you could write a bit more.
Dear Min Joo, I really liked your myth, it was very intereasting as well! Although your myth was quite short, it made me get gripped to it! Your Friend Maxima
Once there was a good dragon with a snake's tail. The other awful dragon was making fun of him but he wasn't upset. He liked his snake's tail very much. One day, a monster called Ealephake attacked the countryside to take over. Drake’s friend fought hard but he was losing, Drake was in the forest for a long walk. When he came his friend was losing against Ealephake. They dig a giant hole in the ground, Drake covered it with sand and leaves then made Ealephake fell into it. So Ealephake died because it was too deep.
Your story was cool.I liked when they dig the hole in the ground and covered with sands and leaves.Also I liked when the dragon didn't get upset. I think you could write more longer.
I think you all heard the 12 task's of Hercules but now he has one more to do is to defet a half bull half dragon half lizard it was deadful if you looked in he's eyes you saw your worst dream so Hercules was in the town and said to the people I will kill the half bull half dragon half lizard!!!But a man said if you want to catch it the cave ha's to be gold so Hercules went to Zeus to ask were is a gold cave Zeus said in the cave is were you think is not so Hercules said at one of the caves in Creat so he went to look the creatur was sleeping so he went at the back and finaly he kill it!!!!!!!So he went back to the town and every body was chering
The Shod A long time ago in Athens there lived a king his name was Adonis. He was very powerful, but he had a horrible problem in Athens. In the Aegean Sea there lived a beast the villagers called it Shod. It was very fierce and had a lot of powers first of all he was king of the underwater! Now that’s not all he had poisonous green skin that destroys anything that touches (even weapons). It had a dragon tail and wings. His legs could be human to walk on land and fish for swimming in the sea. Instead of hands he has got four octopus hands on each side. His eyes where flashing red they could turn anyone into stone, he could run and swim faster than any other creature. He stretches his octopus arms and pulls people and animals from Athens underwater. He is the fastest at flying for he catches loads of flying creatures too. His tail is so strong it would knock down an elephant. The king is very disappointed in what is happening, he decided to give 1 million gold coins to whoever kills the beast. One day a fisher boy came “I know a secret way to get down to the depts. It is very simple I will just walk down and it will pull me in any way.” The king was very surprised that it was only a boy offering him to go, but he agreed anyway. The time was arranged next morning, but as he was leaving the palace doors the princes Ophelia met him and gave him two things a potion to go underwater and an ax. Here came the day of him having to go as Nestor walks down the beach a humongous hand reaches out and pulls him in. He lies to the breast that he is son of one of his brothers, so the beast tells him there is treasure hidden in the last room and the key is under his pillow. When the beast says his last word he realizes that he was tricked but it is to late Ophelia has not only gave Nestor the weapons she had also told him a secrete. The secret is if your mind is blank and you stare strait at his tail he will become weak and he would not move. Staring at his tail he moved closer and closer when he came near enough he took the ax and hit the beast with a mighty slash. Back home he was awarded one million gold coins and all of the beast’s treasure. (He had pretty much) his family was very proud of him and later on he married Ophelia.
Long ago in Ancient Greece there lived a creature called the Snull. It was half bull and half snake and terrified the whole of Persia. It had red eyes, massive horns and a tail which could wrap itself around its victim and squeeze it to death. One day King Taurus decided he had had enough of it and chose to ask the citizens who would volunteer to kill it. Nobody volunteered. He promised great wealth and land to who succeeded. Still nobody volunteered. Prince Dromes then asked his dad if he could go. Taurus immediately refused. Dromes so desperately wanted to go that he disguised himself as a poor young villager. He went to the king and asked for permission. Not knowing who the villager was he approved and sent him on his way.
ReplyDeleteThe very next night King Taurus was going bonkers trying to find Dromes. All the guards searched and searched until the next day. In the meanwhile Dromes was going around villages asking for directions to the Snull’s lair. Nobody knew the exact location as nobody dared to seek it out. After a week he stumbled across a cave with rotten bones and chunks of fur lying outside. He instantly knew it could only be the Snull’s home. He went inside and heard a very quiet scream for help. He followed the noise and came across a place where there where a few torches lighting a circular room. He then saw a girl tied up to a pole. He let her free and she told him that the Snull was hunting in more towns for people to be his breakfast. They came up with a cunning plan to defeat the Snull…
As planned the Snull would come inside and see everything as usual. Dromes was hiding in the dark with his dagger waiting for his moment to strike. While the animal was distracted Dromes jumped out and slashed with his sword at the beast’s neck. Unfortunately when he was about to attack the Snull walked away to look at his new meal. Seeing Dromes it charged into him and tossed him into the air with his horns. It caught him with his tail and started squeezing him to death. Dromes then found the power he did not know he possessed and hauled himself onto its back. He then kept on slashing his sword at the beast. With one mighty slash at its neck it moaned its last and fell lifelessly onto the ground.
Dromes then freed all the people who had been captured and took them home. He returned to the king’s palace and presented the Snull’s head to the king. Later that day was the ceremony in honour of the villager who had killed the Snull. Everybody gathered as he was presented with the rewards he had been promised. But as he was about to be given his reward he took off his disguise and showed everybody who he was. There was a long silence until King Taurus finally said “We can’t give the reward to a prince.” “Why don’t we give it to the people then,” said Dromes. The king approved and there was a big cheer among the crowd. “All hail prince Dromes the Snull slayer!” They shouted. It took a while till everyone settled down and went off to bed and everything continued as usual.
I liked at the end you used usual and the part the beast you named snull But I think you can put more information on the king taurus
DeleteI liked the name of the monster because snakes and bulls matches very well.But it didn't really make sense
Delete1. I liked that Prince Dromes disguised himself as a villager to fight the monster.
Delete2. I also liked that they gave the reward to the people.
3. But I think you could say more about King Taurus
nice description i also like your beast because i like snakes and bulls i don't like it because maybe you can make a new name for your beast
DeleteI like your beast because I like and very nice description the thing I don't like is the is the name of the beast
DeleteYour story was cool and ınterestıng because the monster sounds powerful
Deleteand Dromes dressed up as an old man
and descrıbe what Dromes looked lıke
Hi Thomas,
DeleteYour story was very interesting, i really liked the part when Dromes decided to dress as a old man!
Maxima.
Your myth was long !I liked when all the guards searched until next day.I think you could put more speech
DeleteIn the ancient times on a mountain there was a beast it was half bull, half dragon. It was called Dragull and it was terrifying. If he touched a person or an animal they would turn in to a stone forever. He could shoot fire from his mouth and could set fire to a village .All the villagers were too scared to enter the mountains. No one had ever been brave enough to find and kill the terrifying beast. They had been scared that the Dragull would come to their village. They also didn’t go up there, not because of that they would turn into stone, if the villager ran down from the mountains to the village the Dragbull would come after the villager and kill the villager and destroy the village. One day there was a man called Minos he had heard about the beast and decided to help the poor villagers. So he told the villagers that he was going to make their life easy for them. The villagers were so happy that a man had come to help them at last. So he stayed in a house that the villagers had offered him. It was their best cozy and warm house because he was going to kill the beast the next day. But the man had not slept all night he had been making a plan to kill the beast. But he had had some sleep. In the morning he sharpened all the weapons he needed to kill the beast. He put his armor on and when he got out of the house the whole village was cheering for him. He was so happy and nervous. So he went along walking to the mountain after a few hours he was tiered and lost he had no food and was starving. But he didn’t give up as few days past he saw a wise man who was camping. Because Minos needed to get to the mountain he had to through the forest. He asked the wise man for help. The man was generous to give him some food and gave him a compos to guide his way. Minos thanked him so he set of and when he arrived at were the beast lived, he saw how big and terrifying the beast was but he was not going to give up. So he started to fight with this beast for many days. At last the Dragbull was weak and Minos gave him one last hit and he thought the dragbull was dead but no the dragbull was not dead. It was just weak, to shoot Minos. Minos was turned into stone but what Minos did not know that he was powerful to escape the beasts magic so after few days minos was not stone any more. He went to kill the best this time and he had killed the beast and went back to the village. All the villagers were so happy they let him have there best house forever. He was rewarded 1000000000000000000000000000000000 gold.
ReplyDeleteA very exciting story. I liked the adjectives you used but next time you should use paragraph.
DeleteAt the end I liked the way you used 100000000000000000000000000000000000 gold at the end as a reward because he did a good thing for the village. liked the beast as well half bull and half dragon it might have been terrifiying
DeleteI liked the part when Minos had gone to kill the beast because he was so brave and when he met the wise man who gave a cumpus but in the end how did he defeat the Dragull
DeleteDid you copy the part of set fire to villages?I like the part when he touches a person or animal they will turn in to stone.
Delete1. I liked how he sharpened all his weapons.
Delete2. I liked how he was rewarded with 1000000000000000000000000000000000000000 gold.
3. You wrote there instead of they're.
The beast must have been terrifying.Because dragon and the bull are both strong.But the part when you said there were hairs were a bit strange because the bull doesn't take the shower or anything and the hair can't come out of its body.
DeleteYour monsters name was cool
Deleteand whoever was rewarded would become rıch
but maybe descrıbe the beast
Hi Hazal,
Deleteyour story was cool, i also liked the way you described the monster!
I really liked reading your story!
Hi Hazal
DeleteI liked your story a lot and it was very interesting. My favourite part was when Minos thought that the beast was dead but it was not. I think you need to read back your writting because some parts did not nake sence.
Hi!!
DeleteProud myth was interesting!I liked when Minos got best house and some golden.Also I liked when you told about the beast.
King Theseus of Athens was a powerful ruler. He was loved by his people because he protected and provided for all the villages in Athens. His son Prince Percy was a very brave young man seeking for an adventure. Athens was not always safe because every midnight comes a creature called Ligon. It was half lion, half dragon. His mission was to set villages on fire and eat all humans in order to survive. During the daytime it fly's back to his cave on the Island of Crete to sleep. Percy was tired of this beast killing his father's people. So bravely he asked his father's permission if he can go and kill the monster. His father very concerned replied, "yes you may go and you can use the boat of Athens". "You should also use these two types of sails", said the King. One is white and the other is black. The white one means that they are still alive, the black one meant that they had died. "Farewell my son, and I will be waiting for you", said King Theseus. The next day Percy sailed to the Island of Crete along with five brave men.
ReplyDeleteWhen they arrived, they went to find the beast and kill it before dark. Percy told the men that the cave is on top of the mountain. When they arrived, they began to climb the mountain. After ten minutes the Ligon flew down and captured all six men and put them a wooden cage. Everywhere in the cage there were bones from other victims. Percy found a plan to break out of the cage, by taking out his sword and cut the wooden cage. He moved slowly and quietly like a mouse towards the creature. With mighty sword he chopped the creature's head off. He then cut his wings and with the help of his men, they made a glider.
They glided towards the shore and jumped into the boat with the creatures head.
As he was arriving in Athens he remembered to raise his white sails as an indication that he was alive. When his father saw that he was overjoyed and he gathered everybody from Athens for a welcome home party.
Today the head of Ligon is still seen hanging on the top of the hill to remind everyone that Athens is in no danger.
The end.
By Tomas Fernandes
Very good details Tomas. I liked the adjectives you used too. Next time you could describe the problem more.
DeleteI liked te way you used '' he was seeking for an adventure'' and the end when you did ''today the head of ligon is still seen hanging on the top of the hill to remind that athens is in no danger'' but I think it can be bigger.
DeleteI liked the part when Percy killed the beast and made the glider but you have copied the sails part from another myth.
Delete1. I liked that the ligons head was put on the top of a hill to show the people they were in no danger.
Delete2. I liked that it had the white flags like in Theseus and the Minotaur.
3. But you could've described the 5 men better.
Hi Tomas,
DeleteYour myth was very interesting!
I like the way you ended your Myth.
you could improve on writing some commas.
Maxima
1.I like it how you wrote the story about theseus and the minotaur but changed it.
Delete2.Your monster sounds cool.
1.Maybe describe what your monster looked like.
nice names and I liked the part when the beast set fire to the villages maybe next time make a new name for the beast
Delete.I like your myth.I like when the Percy asked his father if I can go kill the monster.Also I liked when he came he put the white sail so he is alive.
DeleteWell,your story is very well written but l think you copied one of the myth and legend story,especially when you said black is s dead and white is alive.
DeleteWow! Liked your story so much. It was very interesting and cept you hooked. I think you could describe the beast a bit more.
DeleteScotty and the Dragon of Egypt.
ReplyDeleteIt was so long that nobody could even remember what was there. It happened when there were still dragons and other scary creatures. In the most Ancient place in the whole wide world… In Egypt!
In a small city lived an unusual boy, his name was Scotty. He was very strong and even when he was very small when could lift up everything, even his bed!
Once in a rainy day Scotty’s mother heard that there was a giant beast in Cairo, near their village, about to burn all the houses in Egypt! Scotty begged his mom if he could try to beat the Dragon, but his mother would never ever let him. There were other kids who wanted to join him. His own brother Jake and even his sister Florence would like to try (They thought the dragon was just a toy which they could break). They begged, and begged and finally managed to make their mom agree to let them go.
They packed their stuff and left towards the Desert. Florence took a map with her and a ball of string that she used to create a big trap for that monster.
“Oh, look we have to go in that Desert. I’m staying here no matter what!” Shouted Florence. She was too scared of going into that Desert because of the food and the water situation. She was saying she would lose that big string trap which she was making for ages. “Please come, we will take care of all your stuff!” Said Jake. Finally they all went in and their feet were starting to get stuck in the sand….
It was very hard getting out of the sand, and on the way Scotty was the only one left. His brother and sister got injured so they tried to get back home however they got so sick that they fell and fainted.
TO BE CONTINIUED...
1.Scotty was really powerful when he was young.
Delete2.The name of your characters were cool.
1.describe what the beast looked like.
in the second paragraph it does not make sense I liked the part when they went to the desert
DeleteYour story is very interesting.All the sentences make sense.I am now wandering what would happen next!
DeleteWhen Jake woke up he could not see Florence, they got separated.
ReplyDeleteScotty reached the place where the Dragon lived. The villagers gave Scotty the best sword and shield they had, showed him the way to the dragons cave where in every corner sculls, cobwebs and skeletons lay.
By this time Jake and Florence found each other by shouting names and coming towards the calling. And later, when they realized Scotty was not near, they remembered that they felt sick and let him go alone to beat the dragon. “We should come to Scotty and help him!” worried Florence said. Jack agreed and they went to the villagers to ask for a map. After they got it they ran as fast as they could because they knew Scotty was in big trouble…
When Scotty reached the end of the cave the monster popped out in front of him and took him by the leg, up into the air and was about to eat him! But then Scotty remembered he had the trap that his sister made. He tied one end to the stone, and then flew down like a monkey! Later he took his sword to fight the dragon! But the dragon quickly snatched the sword and threw it on the floor which made a big thump!
“We finally made it!” Shouted Jake.
Florence was so happy that she fell on the floor and rolled very fast to a giant leg, and her smile faded away, it was the Dragon!
“What are you doing here?” Said Scotty, as he kicked the dragon on the head.
“We came here to help you!” Shouted Florence, using her trap to capture the monster.
When Florence finally got the beast she pulled it as hard as she could and dragged the monster with Scotty and Jake’s help to the cliff, and in a moment or two they managed to throw the dragon down the cliff! But what they did not know is that the dragon could fly…
In about five seconds the dreadful beast appeared and bit Scotty with his fiery teeth! Scotty did not give up, so he secretly crept to the cave and got his sword, took it and ran to beat the monster. Scotty was winning, he used the sword very carefully until the beast used its tail and broke the sword! Scotty was so angry that he ran to the monster and picked it up threw it on the floor; He never knew he had that power! Then he asked Florence for the big trap, when she gave the trap they all covered the beast with it so it could not escape!
Later when the kids were about to go Jake forgot the map, it was left in the cave! However the saved villagers gave them a present! It was a flying carpet, and if you went in and said where you want to be, you would be there in no time. Scotty took the present, placed it on the floor, told his brother and sister to come and they flew away!
When they came home their mother was very happy, she prepared a wonderful dinner and asked her children everything what happen!
It is said that in their house there is a flying carpet lying on their dining table till now, and every night it fly’s around and has very much fun!
Thank you for reading my own Legend(:
I liked the very exciting start you did. I also liked the fight a lot. Next time you could describe the battle more.
DeleteWOW this story is BIG at the first part I liked the way you said to be continiued.... but you could have done it at 1 story
Delete1. I think it is very exiting.
Delete2. I liked that it was very long like a book!
3. I don't understand what the last sentence means.
I liked all the description that you had put in and that Scotty and his brother and sister got a magic carpet but how did the childeren thing the dragon could not fly didnt they see the wings
Delete1.Your monster nearly ate Scotty.
Delete2.how did the flying carpet get on their dinner table
1.Describe what the monster looked like.
Maxima your story is very long!!I liked when they got present which was flying carpet that get back to there house.Also I liked when the dragon took the sword and threw it to the ground .
DeleteWow!your story was very long and good too.I felt happy when they killed the dragon with the trap.It was also amazing when Scotty threw the dragon.He should have been very strong!
DeleteThat was such a long story it took 5 minutes to read. It was interesting. I really liked the part when they finaly kill the dragon.
DeleteThe shadow man
ReplyDeleteLong ago, there was a woman called Arianne in the Ancient Greece. She was as strong as Hercules and beautiful as Aphrodite. She was also a princess in Athens too. In Athens there was a problem. The people who were from Athens complained the king of Athens every day. The princess Arianne was sure that she heard screams, bumps and all sorts of noisy sounds coming out of people's houses. The palace was always crowded cause people were always complaining. She couldn't stand it anymore and told her father that she should go and sleep at one of the neighbor's house and see what was going on.
Her father king Magnum, was desperate for Arianne to not go. However, Arianne didn't change her mind....
The day after that, Arianne went to an old neighbor’s house and asked her if she could sleep there for 1 night. The old lady's answer was "yes” because she wanted Arianne to save her from the terror.
At that night, when the clock stroke 12 o'clock Arianne could hear some sounds of someone walking. She was sure that it was someone who surprised everyone. The door opened and the creature came into the house of the old lady’s. After a while, Arianne could see a candle and a torch.IT WAS A SHADOW MAN!!!!She was so surprised that she nearly fainted but got her mind back and thought of some ways to get away from the shadow man. Her best idea was to break the torch, switch off the light and blow the candle. The idea of hers worked very well because it was shadow man and shadow can't survive without the light. From then on, the shadow man didn't come back to Athens because it was so frightened of Arianne. So, that’s how she began her life of heroine.
I liked the way you described Arianne. I also liked how she solved the problem. Next time you could explain it a little bit more.
Delete1. I liked how the monster was made of shadows.
Delete2. I liked how she killed it.
3. Maybe you could say why they were complaining.
I liked that Arianne went to save her people from Athens and that when the clock struck 12:00 the shadow man came but next time I think you should have made both the hero/heroin and the villian fight togeather.
DeleteYour myth was very cool!I liked when Shadow didn't came back because of the Arianne. Also I liked when the Arianne was so surprised because of the shadowman.I think you could wrote more longer.
DeleteI liked your story I think it was relly interesting, I really liked the part when Arianne saw the Shadow man. I think you could write a bit more.
DeleteDear Hee Jae,
DeleteI really liked your legend!!
My Favourite part was when the Shadow man was so scared that he never came back!
Your best friend Maxima!
maybe next time can you not copy a name from a different story apart from that I like it because it has a happy ending
Delete1.Your monster was really powerful
Delete2.Arianne was very powerful
1.Maybe say what shadow mans power is.
I liked the name you used and and the whole story but you could have named the shadow man something else
DeleteA long time ago in an old castle lived a king called king Peter. King Peter had a daughter called Audra. King Peter lived in a huge castle with his daughter but the castle was an old castle. His daughter was a very pretty girl. In one of the rooms he kept a monster the monster was half tiger half snake. That room’s door was locked so that no one could open it. He kept the monster there if any enemies would attack. No one knew where the key was except for King Peter and Audra. Their enemy was King Anton and his son Lenny. Audra didn’t want to fight. She didn’t want to have enemies. Lenny didn’t like fighting either but he knew they were in danger with the monster alive. So he went to try and kill the monster. He took everything he needed. He took his sword he took arrows and he set of on his way. He knew this was going to be hard because the monster was very powerful. It could catch and hit with its snake tail and scratch or bite with its teeth. But he would still try and kill the monster.
ReplyDeleteAuda saw him coming and asked him what he was here for. So he told her and she decided to help him because she didn’t want to have enemies. She gave him the key of the room and told him that the weak spot of the monster was its ears it got weak when it heard loud sounds. So he went in and made as much sound as he could. Then he saw his chance and killed the monster. When he killed the monster he came out and thanked Audra for her help.Audra told her dad what happened .At first he was angry then later on he was happy of that.Lenny told his dad too and he was happy also. Both kings were happy and there was no more fighting.
Hi!Ulgen
DeleteI really liked your myth.I liked when the Lenny took all the thing that he had to kill the monster.Also I liked when the Audra gave him a key to go inside.I think you could watch spellings!
Your myth was very interesting because you used a lot of adjectives and you described the monster really well. My favorite part was when both of the kings were happy. I think you could describe the setting better.
DeleteI liked that bothe daughter or the son did not want fight but you should have told how big the room was where the monster was kept and you should have made both of them fight because how was it so easy to kill the creature.
Delete1. I liked that it had a happy ending.
Delete2. I liked that when it was weak it would hear loud noises.
3. Why did you not tell us the name of the monster?
I liked your start and ending. I also liked the ways the monster could attack it's victim. Next time you could give the creature a name.
DeleteHi Ulgen,
DeleteYour story was great!
I liked the part when you said that the door was locked, and only the king and his daughter could free the monster.
Maxima
I like every thing about the myth because it was interesting
Delete1.I like your monster half tiger half snake.
Delete2.why didn't audra want to have enemies.
1.You could have said why the kings were enemies.
I liked the combination of the beast and the kings names but you could have named the beast
DeleteI liked your story very much.And it must have been very funny if Lenny screamed and make funny sounds infront of the terrifying monster in real life!
DeleteThe Monger (half monkey half tiger)
ReplyDeleteOnce there was a terrifying creature called the Monger who lived in a cave near the beach every night it would go through the woods and set fire to someone’s house. The Monger had three red eyes it had hairy skin and teeth like knives. This strange animal was half monkey half tiger.
One silent night the Monger walked through the woods to set fire to someone’s house suddenly it heard a CRACK a tree fell over in front of the Monger. Then the Monger had to go around the tree and go to a house that everyone was asleep in. The Monger found a house so the Monger jumped on the roof and broke it he robbed two people named Charlie and Susan then they both woke up and escaped then house caught on fire and burnt down.
The Monger retreated so it would not go to jail and die. The Monger ran in to his cave and hid on the end of the cave because it was dark and spooky but what he did not notice was everyone could see his shiny red eyes. When the Monger woke up the cops suddenly saw and caught the Monger. The cops threw the Monger in jail...
Hi Nicolas
DeleteI liked the story i liked that you put the descripsion clearly and neatly but what you could improve on is when you put broke it you should put a full stop and then he
I liked your story so much because it was interesting and it made you exited to read on. I liked the part when Monger robbed the house. I think you could have writen a bit more.
DeleteI liked that the monger had 2 eyes but do you think that there would have been cops in ancient times and next time a bit longer.
Delete1. I liked that you described the monger a lot.
Delete2. I liked how his red eyes gave him away.
3. But it's a bit short.
I liked the way you described the Monger. I also liked the adjectives you used. Put more details in to make it longer.
DeleteYour myth was nice.I liked when the Monger walked through the wood to set a fire to someone's house then suddenly it heard a crack and tree fell over the Monger.I think you could wrote more longer.
DeleteHi Nicolas,
DeleteYour story was very good!
I really liked the way you described your monster!
You could improve on writing some commas in your Myth.
Maxima.
I really like your myth there is not one thing dad about it
DeleteYour beast name is very cool and the run of the monger but I think you can do a longer story
DeleteI think the title is very cool!
DeleteJack and the Beast
ReplyDeleteLong long time ago there was a man his name was Jack, he lived in the mountains where he had small hut he lived. One morning he had gone for a walk, while he was walking he came across a place he had never seen before. It was a cave, Jack decided to go in the cave. It was pitch black so he had put his arms in front him. Jack kept on going until his hands touched a hairy beast.........
"Ahhhhh!" screamed Jack.
Jack ran as fast as he could and managed to get out, but then the hairy beast came, its tail looked like a snake his body like a lion and a head of a human. "My name is Snalyman 1 upon 3 snakes, 1 upon 3 lion and 1 upon 3 human. I own the cave you came in so you will wish that you hadn’t come in." said Snalyman
"Please don’t eat me!" pleaded Jack.
Suddenly a blue thing jumped onto Snalyman. “Hello my name is Catman I am the police of this mountain, never come here and go home.
"Thanks."
But Snalyman was getting up and attacked Catman." Run! “Shouted Catman
but Jack got a branch and hit on Snalyman. But Snalyman dodged and started chasing Jack, but Jack jumped up to dodge Snalyman."You can’t defeat me!"
"Yes I can."
And the next 0.000001 second Catman came from behind and pushed Snalyamn off the mountain.
"How can I repay you." said Jack
"Never come here again."
"Ok," said Jack
and from that day on Jack never came here again.
I liked your myth.When the Jack went to into a cave and the hairy beast came.I think you could put more adjectives.
Delete1. I liked that in 0.000001 second Catman came from behind and pushed Snalyman off the mountain.
Delete2. I liked that his name was Snalyman.
3. I don't understand what this means: 1 upon 3 snakes, 1 upon 3 lion and 1 upon 3 human.
I liked the name Snalyman. I also liked the problem. Describe the dilemma more next time.
DeleteI like your myth because it was interesting
Delete1.The police sounded friendly.
Delete2.Catman was strong.
1.Describe what Catman looked like.
Hi Ali,
DeleteYour story was very creative!
I liked the way you named your heroes.
The only thing i don't understand is: if you wrote this myth was a long time ago, how could your "Catman" exist?
Maxima
I liked the way you used speech marks and the right amount of interest you used but you could have done a paragraph
DeleteI really liked your story ecspesially the part when catman comes. I also liked the part where snalyman dies. I think you should read back to check if it makes sence.
DeleteI liked the part when Jack touched the monster!It was very exciting!!!!
DeleteLong ago in ancient Rome a boy named Jack lived in a cave. The cave was close to the Coliseum. One day when he came home to the cave he saw dead bodies covered in blood. Then he saw a monster. The monster was half dragon and half bull. When Jack saw the beast he ran as fast as he could to the city but the beast was chasing him when Jack got to the city he closed the gates. Then he ran to the palace to tell the guards and the empire. Then his solders ran off to find the beast 10 hours later the solders still hadn’t returned so another grope of solders went to find the beast. When the solders got to the cave they saw the beast. Then they tried to escape but it was too late the beast had seen them. They were scramming so loud the cave started to crumble down everyone was dead accept one solder when he woke up he looked for survivors there were no survivors then he started walking to the palace. Then he saw the beast then the solder took his sword and killed the beast when he returned he told the king then the king gave him 100 gold coins
ReplyDeleteThe end
Keenan I liked your myth.When Jack ran to places and went to the palace to tell the empire and guards.Also I liked when the soldiers went to find the beast for 10hours.I think you could watch spellin.
DeleteI liked your story very much because it was very interesting. My favourite part was when the king gave him 100 gold coins. I think you should make your sentences shorter.
Delete1. I liked that it was set in ancient Rome.
Delete2. It was good the soldier was given 100 gold coins.
3. You should of spelt group better.
I liked that the boy lived in a cave but what was the soldiers name who killed the beast and what happened to the other group of soldiers.
DeleteI liked the setting and the problem. Watch your spelling and punctuation next time.
Delete1.Good idea half dragon half bull.
Delete2.the story was good.
1.What was the beasts name.
I like your setting and the combination but it is very but small.
DeleteHi Keenan,
Deleteyour story was very good!
I liked the part when Jack beat the beast!
Maybe you could find another word for "Then" because you used it quite a lot!
Maxima
Watch your spellings and don't forget to put the period!!!!!!
Delete
ReplyDeleteDevilman and the Areculas
In Ancient Greek, Mountain there was a creature called Devilman who never dies and had pointy red horn. That Devilman was lonely so he went to the village. That village had lots of beautiful ladies. The Devilman took the ladies to the mountain. There was a man called Areculas who was the prince of Athens who had strong arms and powerful weopons. Areculas heard about the Devilman and brought him to the sea and threw into the sea. Now the Devilman was gone. But next day the Devilmen was alive.Areculas was so surprised. Now the Devilman took the children. So Areculas went to Devilman and hit Devilman's finger with the stone. Now the Devilman was dead. All the people who lived at the village were really happy.
The End
Hi Min Joo
DeleteYour myth was very interesting and i liked it very much. I liked the part when Areculas killed the Devilman. I think you could write a bit more.
1. I liked the beast was a devilman.
Delete2. I liked the name Areculas.
3. You could've made it longer.
I liked that the Devilman could never die but how did he die in the end.
DeleteI liked the powers the Devilman has. I also liked the name Areculas. Make it longer next time.
Deletecheck your English
Delete1.Your monster sounds powerful.
Delete2.You changed Hercules name into Areculas.
1.It said that the Devilman could never die but he died
Dear Min Joo,
DeleteI really liked your myth, it was very intereasting as well!
Although your myth was quite short, it made me get gripped to it!
Your Friend Maxima
But Min joo,how could the devilman still be alive?You said he doest die at the first.Well,l still liked your story........
DeleteThe hero of the countryside
ReplyDeleteOnce there was a good dragon with a snake's tail. The other awful dragon was making fun of him but he wasn't upset. He liked his snake's tail very much.
One day, a monster called Ealephake attacked the countryside to take over. Drake’s friend fought hard but he was losing, Drake was in the forest for a long walk. When he came his friend was losing against Ealephake. They dig a giant hole in the ground, Drake covered it with sand and leaves then made Ealephake fell into it. So Ealephake died because it was too deep.
Your story was cool.I liked when they dig the hole in the ground and covered with sands and leaves.Also I liked when the dragon didn't get upset. I think you could write more longer.
DeleteI enjoyed your story because it was very interesting. My favorite part was when Drake dug the hole. I think next time you should write a bit more.
DeleteHi bongyunn
DeleteI liked your story you did a nice story i liked that there were two dragons fighting but you could improve on doing it longer
1. I liked they made a trap.
Delete2. I liked the name Ealephake.
3. You could describe Ealephake more.
I liked Drake had a friend and dug a deep whole but I did not understand anything else
DeleteI liked the name Ealephake. I also liked the trap that Drake set to catch Ealephake. Use more details next time.
Deletemaybe next time make it a bit longer
Delete1.your dragon was cool.
Delete2.It was a cool story.
1. Maybe a bit longer
Hi Bongyunn,
Deleteyour myth was very interesting!
i liked how you named your characters!
Maxima.
I don't really understand your story.
DeleteI think you all heard the 12 task's of Hercules but now he has one more to do is to defet a half bull half dragon half lizard it was deadful if you looked in he's eyes you saw your worst dream so Hercules was in the town and said to the people I will kill the half bull half dragon half lizard!!!But a man said if you want to catch it the cave ha's to be gold so Hercules went to Zeus to ask were is a gold cave Zeus said in the cave is were you think is not so Hercules said at one of the caves in Creat so he went to look the creatur was sleeping so he went at the back and finaly he kill it!!!!!!!So he went back to the town and every body was chering
ReplyDeleteThe Shod
ReplyDeleteA long time ago in Athens there lived a king his name was Adonis. He was very powerful, but he had a horrible problem in Athens. In the Aegean Sea there lived a beast the villagers called it Shod. It was very fierce and had a lot of powers first of all he was king of the underwater! Now that’s not all he had poisonous green skin that destroys anything that touches (even weapons). It had a dragon tail and wings. His legs could be human to walk on land and fish for swimming in the sea. Instead of hands he has got four octopus hands on each side. His eyes where flashing red they could turn anyone into stone, he could run and swim faster than any other creature. He stretches his octopus arms and pulls people and animals from Athens underwater. He is the fastest at flying for he catches loads of flying creatures too. His tail is so strong it would knock down an elephant.
The king is very disappointed in what is happening, he decided to give 1 million gold coins to whoever kills the beast. One day a fisher boy came “I know a secret way to get down to the depts. It is very simple I will just walk down and it will pull me in any way.” The king was very surprised that it was only a boy offering him to go, but he agreed anyway. The time was arranged next morning, but as he was leaving the palace doors the princes Ophelia met him and gave him two things a potion to go underwater and an ax.
Here came the day of him having to go as Nestor walks down the beach a humongous hand reaches out and pulls him in. He lies to the breast that he is son of one of his brothers, so the beast tells him there is treasure hidden in the last room and the key is under his pillow. When the beast says his last word he realizes that he was tricked but it is to late Ophelia has not only gave Nestor the weapons she had also told him a secrete. The secret is if your mind is blank and you stare strait at his tail he will become weak and he would not move. Staring at his tail he moved closer and closer when he came near enough he took the ax and hit the beast with a mighty slash.
Back home he was awarded one million gold coins and all of the beast’s treasure. (He had pretty much) his family was very proud of him and later on he married Ophelia.